I was there when you are contemplating the creation of this poem!
This is cinematic. This can be actually mistaken for the Matrix Trilogy. Pity for the purse, it was only the thing in this poem ugly. I mean, a purse hugging a floor. I imagined someone else, and I’d keep it as a secret.
heheh, bitaw nix..
i remember that day well, cramming and sleepless
for that cw101 portfolio..
when it was first bill gates coin purse, i was really amaze,
the image then is good..
i love the humor i have created then,
si bill gates?may coin purse?heheh, quite a queer one..
but i love the way how you came up with that idea..
subsequently, i love the new furnished one,
the coin purse is yours and it still works for an image..=)
I found the words “old” and ‘gold” seems to be very significant in this haiku.
the speaker might have been keeping the coin purse for a long time and what are inside of it are the coins than s/he really treasures. These words could express how s/he values the time s/he has the coin purse with her/him.
AAAAARRRRRRRGGGHHH!!! GOLD! THOUSANDS OF GOLD!!! lamia sa sonic property ani nga poem oi! parang clings ng coin sa floor ung “s” na letters and floor sounds prolonged parang ung pagikot2 ng coin for the last moment!!! shet!!! aaaarrrrrrggghhh!!!
Some subliminal something in here… just playing before my eyes.
But I can’t notice it (subliminal ganii!)…
I find this poem sad, really… Though the manifest is about
golden coins! I mean, sad for the owner, right? Ah, basta…
On the other hand, the poem shows the natural tendency of things (in this world)–It’s in your use of the word “gravity”… And the poem, for me, is saying something like the end of the material conquest…. I mean, purse is where you put your wealth, your acquired wealth, right? And the time you lose hold of it, the tendency is that you’ll lose it (your wealth)!
Everything goes down in this world, right, Josh?
Congrats…!
uhm… given that coin purse usually comes in small size, how cud it hold thousands of golden coins?
plus the act of embracing the floor should come from somethin wide, wide…wide…
if that is ever going to be the case, the coin purse is not the right device to be used..
but hey, tama man pud diay, now i get it, hehehe, kaya nga it bursts the coins coz it cant contain what’s inside it anymore.. tsk..tsk..tsk
whew..like a person spilling her bitterness towards someone that the heart becomes so small for it, then you can do nothing but release an embrace (form of forgiveness).
hmmm…Bitterness is golden, only when it (still) works for you, not the other way around.
I like how the words are played-the proper choice of the words used in each of the lines.As I take it, it tells about being wealthy or rich financially. Though the coin purse is gold still it didn’t defeat its purpose- to be the dwelling of the dough. And when the old coin purse fell it swallowed a lot of money embracing the floor. The image of embracing the floor is splendid because it only tells us that the purse really contains a lot of money, but how could that be?
It is only a purse- small and limited. It could not hold a bag of coins since it is just a small purse. Literally saying it is, but when we take it metaphorically it isn’t. Di natin alam na several are checks slid into it and each of the check amounts a million. Hahahaha.
nikkiboy said,
December 11, 2007 at 2:33 pm
i remember the days, when you’re here with me!
I was there when you are contemplating the creation of this poem!
This is cinematic. This can be actually mistaken for the Matrix Trilogy. Pity for the purse, it was only the thing in this poem ugly. I mean, a purse hugging a floor. I imagined someone else, and I’d keep it as a secret.
pzerolaris said,
December 11, 2007 at 3:44 pm
haha. matrix.
ako di ko gets. why hug? di na xa matanggal? meh love affair sila ng floor? hehe.
noshei said,
December 12, 2007 at 6:52 am
i like it…
hehe.
what’s with the word, “old”?
hartqt said,
December 12, 2007 at 9:04 am
a forgotten purse that keeps golden memories? it’s good josh! I actually get the feeling! Doing well!
blackrose said,
December 12, 2007 at 9:22 am
heheh, bitaw nix..
i remember that day well, cramming and sleepless
for that cw101 portfolio..
when it was first bill gates coin purse, i was really amaze,
the image then is good..
i love the humor i have created then,
si bill gates?may coin purse?heheh, quite a queer one..
but i love the way how you came up with that idea..
subsequently, i love the new furnished one,
the coin purse is yours and it still works for an image..=)
mysticalhorizon said,
December 12, 2007 at 9:27 am
I found the words “old” and ‘gold” seems to be very significant in this haiku.
the speaker might have been keeping the coin purse for a long time and what are inside of it are the coins than s/he really treasures. These words could express how s/he values the time s/he has the coin purse with her/him.
myan may said,
December 12, 2007 at 11:17 am
bakit xa nahulog?maganda ang image.pwede din na lagyan ng sound ang pagkakahulog ng mga gold coins.tpos diba ang coins kung mahulog muligid…=)
jep said,
December 12, 2007 at 2:53 pm
waw. i see an old witch holding a very old purse which contains the treasure that will help save Princess Sarah.
anyway. even though it was not stated, i can hear the coins hitting the floor. marble-tiled and floor?
kornfleik said,
December 13, 2007 at 8:56 am
AAAAARRRRRRRGGGHHH!!! GOLD! THOUSANDS OF GOLD!!! lamia sa sonic property ani nga poem oi! parang clings ng coin sa floor ung “s” na letters and floor sounds prolonged parang ung pagikot2 ng coin for the last moment!!! shet!!! aaaarrrrrrggghhh!!!
this is golden…
bokk said,
December 13, 2007 at 9:35 am
Rich man di-ay ka kaau josh…!
Some subliminal something in here… just playing before my eyes.
But I can’t notice it (subliminal ganii!)…
I find this poem sad, really… Though the manifest is about
golden coins! I mean, sad for the owner, right? Ah, basta…
On the other hand, the poem shows the natural tendency of things (in this world)–It’s in your use of the word “gravity”… And the poem, for me, is saying something like the end of the material conquest…. I mean, purse is where you put your wealth, your acquired wealth, right? And the time you lose hold of it, the tendency is that you’ll lose it (your wealth)!
Everything goes down in this world, right, Josh?
Congrats…!
umaispink said,
December 16, 2007 at 10:02 am
uhm… given that coin purse usually comes in small size, how cud it hold thousands of golden coins?
plus the act of embracing the floor should come from somethin wide, wide…wide…
if that is ever going to be the case, the coin purse is not the right device to be used..
but hey, tama man pud diay, now i get it, hehehe, kaya nga it bursts the coins coz it cant contain what’s inside it anymore.. tsk..tsk..tsk
whew..like a person spilling her bitterness towards someone that the heart becomes so small for it, then you can do nothing but release an embrace (form of forgiveness).
hmmm…Bitterness is golden, only when it (still) works for you, not the other way around.
uhm, i know ,far out na kau ko… hahaha
powetree said,
December 22, 2007 at 9:04 am
I like how the words are played-the proper choice of the words used in each of the lines.As I take it, it tells about being wealthy or rich financially. Though the coin purse is gold still it didn’t defeat its purpose- to be the dwelling of the dough. And when the old coin purse fell it swallowed a lot of money embracing the floor. The image of embracing the floor is splendid because it only tells us that the purse really contains a lot of money, but how could that be?
It is only a purse- small and limited. It could not hold a bag of coins since it is just a small purse. Literally saying it is, but when we take it metaphorically it isn’t. Di natin alam na several are checks slid into it and each of the check amounts a million. Hahahaha.